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That was beautiful. Some small Wolf never mistake my kindness for weakness the beast inside me is sleeping not dead shirt and typos here. And there which I’ll offer up when I’m on my laptop but truly the writing of the duel and description of Mother Earth was incredible. I love this visualization of Earth. The great story can’t wait to read the other parts. Firstly thank you for posting this. It’s a very intriguing take on the spirit of humanity and your description of Mother Earth is very detailed and evocative.

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I enjoyed the story as a whole, however, the very Wolf never mistake my kindness for weakness the beast inside me is sleeping not dead shirt detailed description of appearance. When applied to the battle scene read to me as stilted and was honestly hard to stay engaged with. And I think you could clean that up by removing one of the modifier phrases you had with every blow or defense. As is, the general themes are great and well-executed. If you were using the longer modifier usage to suggest and evoke the ponderous nature of a battle between two gods than the technique has some merit.

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But Wolf never mistake my kindness for weakness the beast inside me is sleeping not dead shirt going to be difficult for some readers to follow. Again, not an outright criticism or modification, but modifying your words as an attempt to illustrate my feedback. Trying to keep the meaning intact but pruning down the descriptors without going too far and ending up. I see what you mean about it not flowing well. I appreciate the feedback and I definitely will go back to make it more engaging. By all means, it is your work to edit. But I was not intending my feedback to indicate it needed the edits.